Tuesday, 3 March 2015

The cat and dog fight By Richard

Smash! The window breaks as my cat comes out of nowhere! His sharp,vicious teeth shows my dog he's angry as his sharp claws hits the dog. Ouch! My cat's pointy ears look very sharp,fortunately my cat is not using it for the attack. My cat's sharp claws dig into my dog's fur. My cat's fur is waving around,looking like my cat is trying to hypnotise my dog! Finally, the fight is over.

10 comments:

  1. For starters 'for the attack' does not make sence.

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  4. I'm so excited tell me more tell me more...

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  5. F.B:Great work Richard.Great Adjective's and punctuation in your story.
    F.F: Next time you could try to do paragraph's.

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  6. F.B:Great work Richard.Great Adjective's and punctuation in your story.
    F.F: Next time you could try to do paragraph's.

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  7. F.B: great writing Richard thats a great story well done.
    F.F: next time work on your paragrah abit more but it was great

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  8. F.B I like how you put interesting words like vicous in.
    F.W I think you could make better endings and do paragraghs.

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  9. F.B: great writing Richard thats a great story well done.
    F.F: next time work on your paragrah abit more but it was great

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  10. F B: I like how you described how the cat came out of nowhere and that it also goes with the start of the sentence. my window breaks
    F F:to make it even better, you could put it into paragraphs

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